Well, for me the sudden segue into Wes shot him eight times. Eight times, people. was too abrupt. I had to do a mental 'whaaaa?' for a second - Wes shot who eight times? Then my brain caught up. You don't actually mention who Wes shot until after this, and given the fact that there's a lot of canon - and a lot of Wes shooting things - there may be a lot of things Wes shot more than once.
In other words, the transition isn't as smooth as it could be. So I suspect that you need a para or so before this, something that puts it in context. Something that says 'Wes definitely has issues. And if you needed any evidence of this, let us consider Episode X. In which Wes shot his father eight times.'
But that's just my thoughts :)
The rest of it seemed fine, and I thought it interesting the parallels you drew between Wes's patricide and Angel's and Spike's matricide. If you still think something is lacking, maybe you could expand on this - I suspect that there's lots of interesting stuff you could draw out. However, I'm not sure of your audience, or how knowledgeable they'll be, so maybe not :) It's made me go, 'Hmmm... intriguing' though :)
There was one thing that struck me though, and that's that you didn't have any parallels with Connor, which might be interesting too, in that Connor wanted to kill his real father (Angel) and yet didn't want to kill his surrogate father, the one who technically put him into a very dangerous environment and who was, in his way, as abusive as Wes's father appears to be. That might be something worth exploring.
And is it worth elaborating on the change in Wes once he'd failed in his role as Watcher, and become free from his father's immediate influence. I always thought that Wesley did a lot of growing as a person once he hooked up with Angel and Cordy.
And finally (just thinking of these things ::g::) it's interesting that as Wesley grows up (and presumably 'away' from his father), he actually demonstrates much more of that ruthlessness you mention than he did while in the Watchers Council employ.
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In other words, the transition isn't as smooth as it could be. So I suspect that you need a para or so before this, something that puts it in context. Something that says 'Wes definitely has issues. And if you needed any evidence of this, let us consider Episode X. In which Wes shot his father eight times.'
But that's just my thoughts :)
The rest of it seemed fine, and I thought it interesting the parallels you drew between Wes's patricide and Angel's and Spike's matricide. If you still think something is lacking, maybe you could expand on this - I suspect that there's lots of interesting stuff you could draw out. However, I'm not sure of your audience, or how knowledgeable they'll be, so maybe not :) It's made me go, 'Hmmm... intriguing' though :)
There was one thing that struck me though, and that's that you didn't have any parallels with Connor, which might be interesting too, in that Connor wanted to kill his real father (Angel) and yet didn't want to kill his surrogate father, the one who technically put him into a very dangerous environment and who was, in his way, as abusive as Wes's father appears to be. That might be something worth exploring.
And is it worth elaborating on the change in Wes once he'd failed in his role as Watcher, and become free from his father's immediate influence. I always thought that Wesley did a lot of growing as a person once he hooked up with Angel and Cordy.
And finally (just thinking of these things ::g::) it's interesting that as Wesley grows up (and presumably 'away' from his father), he actually demonstrates much more of that ruthlessness you mention than he did while in the Watchers Council employ.
Just some stray thoughts :)